The Untaken Path: Ch 4 • Over The Shoulder

Author : Feathervenom

Date sent : July 26, 2012

Rating : PG (Parental guidance suggested)

Category : Epic

Description : Birch desires Salvia as his doe, but she wishes to remain without a fawn, prompting Bambito stand up for the doe. The rut brings an unnatural silence to Trar's herd as the Captains choose their does and Ronno begins to feel restless and paranoid.

Length : Short -

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The Untaken Path: Ch 4 • Over The Shoulder
By Feathervenom

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May 17, 2013
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i only read to "Bambi had lost, and failed to protect Saliva."
No!!! If he can't win, heal, Bambi! Get your energy back! Don't be weak!
Trar is horrible and I miss the Great prince :cry: :cry:

September 03, 2012
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Huh. Why thank you ^^ what a coincidence, that instead of 'night,' I Accidentally call him 'power!'

September 03, 2012
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First of all: I love this fanfic of yours. Your way of writing is wonderful and the what-if thing is brilliant. I really enjoy reading it.
However, I saw a little spelling mistake in one of the last paragraphs on the first page. You wrote Macht instead of Nacht. (Here's the sentence "He turned away to walk down the meadow, followed by Macht and Huckleberry.") It's nothing, really, but it's kinda ironic that Macht happens to be the German word for power. (I should know, I am German.)
Enough said, keep up the good work.

August 08, 2012
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Well, you're doing a wonderful job so far, laying everything out in a professional fashion and not over-crowding the scene with new characters ;) I'm sure Lihua will make an interesting addition to the story, adding a bit of Oriental flair and passion into the hearts of the young bucks, especially Nacht ^_^

August 07, 2012
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Oh my goodness! This is AWESOME! Poor Salvia, i hope Birch doesnt hurt her... Loving the thing on Huckleberry and Yew, this story is getting more intense. I cant wait for the next chapter ^-^

August 07, 2012
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Thanks! I promise Lihua will get in, I just don't wanna crowd everything together. ;)
Yup, I added Gobo! Why? 'Cuz I felt like it. :P lol.

August 07, 2012
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So awesome :P Aside from the story getting more and more exciting (and the fact that Nacht is just as bada$$ as ever), I must admit you are a very good writer! I'm a sucker for cliffhangers, I do that all the time with my story chapters, so I'm always impressed to see another writer do it too ;) Also, I LOVE that you added Gobo in there! He was one of my favorite characters from the novel ^_^

August 07, 2012
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And here's Chapter Four! Introducing Huckleberry in more detail as well as Yew.

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