|February 28, 2010|
Wow! I really wish I knew what to say. This story is absolutely amazing. I really thought your last story was awesome, but this one is just awe-inspiring.
What I love about this story is the way that you, again, were able to provide flashbacks to bring the moral of the story to life. I always think that using this technique makes a great story. I also love the way that you were able to interpret the hardships and painful experience that Sonya was going through in her life as well as the complexities involved for her to overcome it all. I think that this story has a lot to say about what it is like to be different to others and the consequences of vengeance. The main message of the story to me is that venegeance is a sin, it does not help, and it does not make the pain go away. It only makes things worse.
That quote that you used about being careful when fighting someone as it may hurt someone close to you is very true. That is one of the most important quotes that I have read and heard, and I think that it sends an important message to everyone about the consequences about picking a fight. The same goes with the quote about giving a second chance to those who have done bad things. One author on this site said that everyone deserves a second chance; and I believe that very much. Everyone must have the chance to see what they have done and how they can make up fot their mistakes. I always believed that Steele deserved another chance; but some other authors could not change him because some believed that he would never change. Not entirely true to me. I know that there is always a way for everyone to see reason if they just make the effort. It is all about performing good deeds to erase bad deeds, and Steele did some of that in this story. He still has more to go, but at least he has seen reason in his mistakes.
I have to admit, I cried when Amak was leaving Sonya, because Sonya had already lost her parents and she was going to be orphaned again. I just thought that this part was so sad. That is what I also like about this story: It is very dramatical; and good drama sequences also make good stories.
Also, again, very well written. I can't see any spelling mistakes and your grammar is near perfect; and the story is very clear and concise.
I love your stories so much, mate. Excellent work and I look foward to reading your next ones when they come out.
|February 02, 2010|
Wow!! It was SO AWESOME!!! Make more!!